Dru
Powell
Mr.
McElveen
English
II
13
August 2013
Symbolic Autobiography
There are many that define who I
am as a person. Everyone, whether they
realize it or not, has multiple personalities that change and evolve depending
on their life at that time. However, no
matter how much that wavers, there is always a core foundation that people’s
personalities are built upon. I am
changing as a person everyday, but there are certain symbols that represent my
inner complexion such as the color pink, pictures, my swimming ring, a quote by
Mother Theresa, and a fork. Each of
these symbols have a special meaning in my life and will be an everlasting
source of information about who I truly am as a person.
From a young age, my favorite color was pink
and it hasn’t changed since then. Today
in society, pink represents femininity, and a “girly girl” would be a good way
to describe me. Literally, the color
pink represents my outward appearance and feminist ways. I enjoy shopping, especially with my family,
because they know me well and pick out clothes that I like. I love doing my hair and putting on makeup
just like you would expect any girl to do.
Surprisingly, I don’t wear the color pink a lot. Most of my clothes are neutral or pastel
colors.
Symbolically, the color pink represents
compassion, nurture, and love. In my
life, I try to treat everyone with respect, and I give them a fair chance to
show their real selves without judging them.
If I close myself off from others right from the beginning and refuse to
get to know someone, a lot of valuable relationships could be passed up. I like to develop deep relationships with
people and I enjoy sharing their company.
Once I get comfortable with people, there is a certain trust that is
built and we can share things with each other and ask for advice. Many of my friends come to me for advice,
and I consider it an honor that they value my opinions. Because of my experiences talking to my
friends, I have developed an interest in psychology. My mom is a psychologist, so I get to see how
she impacts people’s lives every day.
Psychology would be a way for me to express my love for helping others.
My room is covered in pictures of my
friends and me. They add personalization
to my room and make it my own. Also,
pictures are an intimate way to decorate any space and make it still
interesting for other people to look at.
The pictures not only reflect the people I like to be with, but also the
things I enjoy doing and places I have been.
I have multiple swim caps on my bulletin board because I swim for
Episcopal and Crawfish Aquatics. Over
Mardi Gras break during ninth grade, I went to Spain with a group of Episcopal
students, and I have several pictures from that trip in my room. I would give anything to go back to Spain,
and the pictures help me remember what a special trip it was.
The pictures in my room serve as constant
reminders of the many special people in my life that I am surrounded with. They represent the experiences I have had and
what I have learned from them. Every
moment that I share with my friends is an opportunity to grow as a person. I learn life lessons from my friends. By just being around them, they help me to
take life a little slower and enjoy it. Sometimes
when I’m having a really good time, I wish that I could just pause life for a
while so it would last forever. Taking
pictures is a way to treasure those moments. Encounters with people in life
serve many purposes and by saving pictures, reflections can be made on my
experiences so that I realize more each day how my friends impact my life.
My favorite piece of jewelry is my
swimming state championship ring. Our
team has a trophy that we all share and it’s displayed at school, but our rings
are our individual trophies. I wear mine
everyday and rarely take it off because it always reminds me of how great that
feeling was to win and keeps me motivated to win again. In some ways, it is a fashion statement and I
like the way it looks, but it doesn’t look like any traditional ring that a
teenager would wear. Typically, people
ask me what it is for, and I enjoy telling them the story behind it.
Besides symbolizing our team’s win, my
ring symbolizes all of the hard work that it took to get to the point in
swimming where I am today. I have been
swimming since sixth grade, and for the last two and a half years, I have
basically dedicated my life to the sport.
I have practice every day, and in the summer, I have practice twice a
day on two days of the week. I am proud
of the work that I have put into this sport and my dedication makes every
accomplishment that much sweeter. This
ring is symbolic of my work ethic, commitment, and sacrifice.
At the end of eighth grade, my parents
gave my sister and me each a framed picture of a poem written by Mother
Theresa. This poem is perfect to live by
because it says to not worry about other people’s thoughts of you and just
worry about yourself. I often find
myself worrying about these things, and if I ever need a reminder to be
courageous, I just go over and look at the picture. It goes like this:
“People
are often unreasonable, irrational, and self-centered. Forgive them anyway. If you are kind, people may accuse you of
selfish, ulterior motives. Be kind anyway.
If you
are successful, you will win some unfaithful friends and some genuine enemies.
Succeed anyway.
If you
are honest and sincere people may deceive you. Be honest and sincere anyway.
What you
spend years creating, others could destroy overnight. Create anyway.
If you
find serenity and happiness, some may be jealous. Be happy anyway.
The good
you do today, will often be forgotten. Do good anyway.
Give the
best you have, and it will never be enough. Give your best anyway.
In
the final analysis, it is between you and God. It was never between you and
them.”
This poem isn’t just a reminder for me
when I am at a tough place in my life.
It is also a reflection of my morals and view of life. I have found that I am a much happier person
when I just worry about myself. Even
when other people make bad decisions, I stick to what my conscience tells me to
do and what I believe is right. This is
an aspect of my life that I am very proud of, and I hope I continue this in the
future. Even if I get a little
distracted, I can look back at the picture and get right back on track. Also, I am catholic and I consider myself a
pretty religious person. I value my
faith and relationship with God because I know without it I wouldn’t be the
person that I am today. I know that
Mother Theresa was a person of great faith, and her life should try to be
emulated.
Finally, a fork is my most important
symbol. A fork is used to eat food, which provides the body with
nutrients. Without nutrients, any body
will start to slowly loose its strength.
Over time, it will shrivel up and not work properly as it should. Characteristically, a fork usually has four
prongs, and each one of those represents a member of my family.
Just as a fork feeds my body
nutritionally, my family feeds me emotionally.
Every night, our family comprised of my mom and dad, twin sister, and
me, sit down at our dining room table for dinner. It is one of the only times in the day that
we all get to be together without having other things taking our attention from
each other. We value the time that we
have together and talk about how our days were and what’s going on in
everyone’s lives. There’s plenty of
joking around, especially from my sister, and we always end up smiling no
matter how bad of a day we had. I am so
thankful for my family and everything they do to make my life the way it is.
Individually the aspects of my life that
these symbols represent are ordinary, and almost every person can relate to
them. When they are combined, they
create an individual person that is different from everyone else. These symbols are all part of what makes me
unique from everyone else and they represent the way that I like to live my
life.
I really liked your draft and the symbols that you wrote about. I felt like they really did reflect who you are as a person and how you have grown over time. You have a few things that you might want to work on though.
ReplyDelete1. in your first sentence, you are missing the word "symbols"
*other than that, good first paragraph
2. in your second paragraph, you don't need the comma after femininity
3. in your third paragraph, you need to add more support. The things you have a good, but if you add more to it, then it could make the idea a lot better. Descriptions are usually good. Also, you should try to talk more about the other things that you said pink represents more. I felt like you only talked about one of them
4. in your fifth paragraph, watch your grammar
*more the comma by the sentence "encounters with people..." to after
the word "purpose"
* your last sentence sounds like a run on sentence. A good place to
split it would be right at " I realize...."
5. in your 6th paragraph, you might want to add some small words, like "it" or description words to make the sentences flow better
6. in your 7th paragraph, you may want to change the word "win" to something more like "victory". The word "win" just sounds funny in that context
7. I really, really like the poem. You should try to introduce it in your paper a little better. Rather than just saying, it goes like...., try saying something that can connect it to the paragraph better
All around, you might want to check your grammar in some spots, but overall it is pretty good. Also, there are some paragraphs that you may want to add some more support in.
Just things that you might want to check over because Mr. Mccelveen mentioned them:
do not say the word "thing" anywhere in your paper
do not say "a lot" when referring to quantity
do not ask questions that will be immediately in your paper
no cliche language
I really liked your paper. The comments that I made are not things that you absolutely have to do. I think your paper would be good either way. Great job!!!
Edited by A.C Whitehurst